You and I, we wait our turn,
We wait for transition to reach our turn,
As change inevitable revolves in time,
But all that really occurs is fate sublime…
For our hearts to feel an urge
Let me sing of another tale:
Of a imprisoned soul of mighty grit,
One that will arise like a free spirit…
She was once too shy to speak,
She was once too weak to proclaim
She was once the downtrodden one,
But my dears, now the tale has changed…!
She enters metamorphosis, still incomplete…
All you and I see, with heartless eyes,
Are failures galore and the end of the road…
But she…she in her silent slumber beholds
With eyes still closed, but a heart so open
A universe at her feet, new love to meet…
She waits in silence for her time,
When no mountain, no trench, nor mist divine
Can stop her from flying,
Can stop her from Becoming…
So, do not crush her humble abode
Adorned with dreams and unsung hopes.
Give her time, for wings to unfold…
Give her time, for winds to catch hold…
Give her time, for metamorphosis complete…
this one is gud ..... kk ... like ... u have turned ur feelings into words ...... n arranged them well /////// the poem has theme , rhythm n style ................ but i don think dats all u need ... the theme shud be contemporary ...... it shud see into the life of people ..... like like ...... wats the purpose if it cant bring abt any change in the situatin( atlest th poem is titled metamorphosis) ................
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if people need to watch ur upcomin articles ... dey shud get empathetic towards ur previous ones ...... ur feelings shud be the readers feelings ....... so begin from d lowest level ................
once u visit the beach ....... writing abt the beauty of the sea is easy ...... but try to write abt the life of fishermen der ....... luk at any classic .... its abt human feelings
manassil angeyatam manushyatvam sukshikkuka ....... manushyatvam ndakumbol nalloru kalakaranakum ........ jeevithathekurichu ezhuthu ........ vikara vicharangal vaakkukalakatte
thanks for going thru my blog..it means a lot to me sreethish.Now i know i'm supposed to reply to ur comment..but let's face it i'm stumped!
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as for metamorphosis..i wasn't indicating at a way to change...i was merely trying to speak out on how ppl wish to change("you and i") but we don't truly..while those who do change (or metamorphosize) r hardly ever noticed or worse they r discouraged...
:)